Electricity-draft
2011/04/24 15:53
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The electricity occupies a very important part in our daily life.If there does not have the electricity, our life would not be such comfortably like now.Most of the people in the earth still don't know that must save the energy.One day,the energy in the earth will be used up.Could we imagine the life there was no electricity?
Light,TV,computer,telephone,etc.Many things in our life need the electric power to operate.If there really don't have electricity.There will no light in the evening and no air conditioning in summer.Besides,we will live without TV and computer. How a terrible thing it is if there doesn't have electricity.And the most important is that we couldn't watch NBA games on TV.
The Earth needs us to protect together.
看NBA季後賽的時候要記得愛護地球喔~~ 
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4樓.2011/05/01 22:37回復真麻煩
such comfortablely應改成 such comfortable
most of the people也多使用 most people 來表示
其他的就算正常了 沒啥錯誤 表達也很清晰
- 3樓.2011/04/27 23:02改錯
our life would not be such "comfortably"可以接副詞嘛?
"How" a terrible thing it is if there doesn't have 應該是WHAT八?
The Earth needs us to protect "it" together.我不知道是不是必要拉~不過可以增加字數XD
英文不好~所以也找不出個啥鬼~"~
謝謝~~ NBA愛好者 於 2011/04/29 21:50回覆 - 2樓.2011/04/27 22:08Electricity-draft
If there does not have the electricity--- there 後面好像不能+HAVE吧!
Could we imagine the life there was no electricity? +個 if 會比較好嗎?
太完美了 比吳家睿睿的好!!!
- 1樓.2011/04/27 20:00找錯!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
so comfortable like now是so
that we must save the energy要有主詞!!
是image
If there really don't have electricity, there......中間是逗號
air conditioner
what a terrible thing是what而不是how
